• “People should be conscious to protect their environment or they should not destroy it atleast.” This would sound better like this: “People should have the awareness to protect theirenvironment.• The thesis statement is a bit unclear. This statement would sound better like this: “There arethree reasons why it is important / significant to protect the environment.”• “Firstly, human only have one known planet earth which can be allowed they living by now, andthe most of environment resources is hard to renew or even non-renewable such as forest, freshwater, and fossil oil.” This sentence is unclear because the sentence structure is toocomplicated, and it makes it hard to understand. It would sound better like this: “Firstly, there isonly one planet Earth, where human can enjoy their life. Many natural resources are notrenewable, and some will take a long time to form. For example, the forests and fossil oil willtake up to 2 million years to renew.”• “Secondly, human have to rely on this their home earth for existing, and the pollution theymade finally harm their own health.” This would sound better like this: “Secondly, humans haveto rely on their planet Earth to live, but the pollution they have caused may harm their ownhealth/well-being.”• “Finally, these environment problems have leaded to the extinction of some rare animals…”This should be: “Finally, these environmental problems have caused the extinction of some rareanimals.”• “To sum up, now it is clear to know the reason why people should protect their environment.And protecting environment will be a long-term and hard trip for human.” This would soundbetter like this: “To sum up, it is very important to protect the environment because without it,life as we know would not exist.” or something like that…
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