Dear Mr. Phyllis Campbell,Re” The U

Dear Mr. Phyllis Campbell,

Re” The Unlikely Twin Cities: London and San Diego”, sponsored new

That is an interesting new when looking further into the trading ties between London and San Diego. As an author, you have created an appealing trade relation between two cities, regardless of the information word count . On the edge of advantages, you have utilized realistic facts to supply a concise introduction of each region, which adequate to provide a shared perspective about each region central features. In particular, you have marked San Diego with its advanced technologies, progressive systems in term of business and education as well as London with its developed export market with the US. Being the reader, I am most satisfied, at the beginning of the new, a simpatico relationship between London and San Diego is apparently manifested through the sentences ” When someone boards a train in London… But they would not be wrong if they did consider that London’s Oyster Card System- the most sophisticated regional automated fare payment and revenue management system in the world, is powered by Cubic, a San Diego-based company with headquarters 5,500 miles down the road”. Reading those sentences, I personally felt like London could not have been famous without London’s Oyster Card System as “ London could not have been famous without San Diego”. Somehow, if it were not for London’s Oyster Card, London could not possess outstanding feature and San Diego also could not receive any advantages from London.The news , in addition, had been easy to access with a clear organization with a picture as well as a simple word choice. Intended to take readers' attention to the conversation between two regional leaders, you are so adroit that you use a certain framework to show your information. By this way, the readers are more likely to “ trust” the good relationship between two cities. However, some readers may raise a question including the credibility of the conversation. There is no specific place and time are mentioned so readers may suspect that the conversation had been setting up before with prepared speech. To improve this issue, I suggest you include a brief note about the conversation composed of place, time, and how the conversation is being recorded.No problem with other things. After all, you have created a fantastic news about mutual relationship between cities, and in this case between London and San Diego.
I also anticipate to read your future news, and if you can response my advice, your new will be perfect.

Hoa Do Thien

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Thưa ông Phyllis Campbell,"Tái The không Twin Cities: London và San Diego", tài trợ mớiThat is an interesting new when looking further into the trading ties between London and San Diego. As an author, you have created an appealing trade relation between two cities, regardless of the information word count . On the edge of advantages, you have utilized realistic facts to supply a concise introduction of each region, which adequate to provide a shared perspective about each region central features. In particular, you have marked San Diego with its advanced technologies, progressive systems in term of business and education as well as London with its developed export market with the US. Being the reader, I am most satisfied, at the beginning of the new, a simpatico relationship between London and San Diego is apparently manifested through the sentences ” When someone boards a train in London… But they would not be wrong if they did consider that London’s Oyster Card System- the most sophisticated regional automated fare payment and revenue management system in the world, is powered by Cubic, a San Diego-based company with headquarters 5,500 miles down the road”. Reading those sentences, I personally felt like London could not have been famous without London’s Oyster Card System as “ London could not have been famous without San Diego”. Somehow, if it were not for London’s Oyster Card, London could not possess outstanding feature and San Diego also could not receive any advantages from London.The news , in addition, had been easy to access with a clear organization with a picture as well as a simple word choice. Intended to take readers' attention to the conversation between two regional leaders, you are so adroit that you use a certain framework to show your information. By this way, the readers are more likely to “ trust” the good relationship between two cities. However, some readers may raise a question including the credibility of the conversation. There is no specific place and time are mentioned so readers may suspect that the conversation had been setting up before with prepared speech. To improve this issue, I suggest you include a brief note about the conversation composed of place, time, and how the conversation is being recorded.No problem with other things. After all, you have created a fantastic news about mutual relationship between cities, and in this case between London and San Diego.Tôi cũng dự đoán để đọc tin tức trong tương lai của bạn, và nếu bạn có thể phản ứng lời khuyên của tôi, mới của bạn sẽ được hoàn hảo.Hoa Do thiên